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Discussion in 'For Sale- Members only' started by Gunsmith@A.A.E., Dec 25, 2012.

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  1. Gunsmith@A.A.E.

    Gunsmith@A.A.E. TS Member

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    OUR FIRST GUNSMITH COMMERCIAL!

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_z3CkkpNVPA

    Please watch and advise!

    Thanks

    Ron
    A.E.E.
     
  2. TARGET1

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    My only suggestion is that the black text does not stand out very well, otherwise it is good.
     
  3. wireguy

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    "American Arms Engineering has been servicing then sport-shooter the soldier and law enforcement since 1989."

    Poor /incorrect use of grammar and spelling

    How about "American Arms Engineering has been servicing sport shooters, soldiers and law enforcement since 1989".
     
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    Dickgshot Well-Known Member

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    The whole thing is poorly written. It won't bother some people, but it will others - and it will cost you customers. It should be easy to find somebody who is proficient in spelling, grammar, and composition.

    I could rewrite it in ten minutes.
     
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    How about:

    American Arms Engineering has been providing quality gunsmithing services to sport shooters, soldiers and law enforcement since 1989".

    Ron Burr
     
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    Towards the end, where it says, "If you can pay for it, we can build it".

    I think you should lose that. Everyone would know that you don't work for free and if they had a project, they would want to know how much up front.

    How about, "If you want it built, we can do it" or "If you want it built, we are your company".

    By asking "If you can pay for it", sort of puts the person you want to be your customer on the defense. Or at least it would if I were your customer.

    Good Luck!

    Hauxfan!
     
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